Month: October 2016

October Writing Update!

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So, I’m currently sitting in my room with a stuffy nose, sore throat, numerous aches & pains, and numb taste-buds which means 2 things: 1) I can’t taste anything = the worst form of suffering because I love food and 2) I’m sick the day of Halloween. Grrrrreat. I also have school tomorrow. Super Grrrrreat. Anyways, before I go and down some more Alka-Seltzer (ew), I thought I’d update you all on what I’ve been up to for the last month or so.

  1. Began an excerpt for my Fantasy Fiction (FF) series, for the first book. #yasssss
  2. Was inspired by a new book I got from B&N as well as an impromptu trip to Longwood Gardens (that place is magical) and wrote an excerpt for an entirely new story idea; worked on developing the plot-line and characters. #wheredidthatevencomefrom
  3. Did some random arting/concept art for my FF series.
  4. Wrote a little more dialogue in my math notebook. It’s starting to spill into my homework…oh boy. 😛
  5. Had a writing/brainstorming session with KD17 in which I started a FF scene, this time for the second book. #productive
  6. Wrote for my main CCR story…I’m still stuck on this one scene I haven’t finished and it’s 9 pages long and I just can’t. Ughhhhhh.
  7. Kept working on that same scene for the CCR story.
  8. And kept working.
  9. Did I mention that scene yet?
  10. Wrote more “math-notebook” dialogue and a tiny bit of a scene for my FF series.
  11. Began going through story files. AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA.
  12. Reconstructed a storyboard for my CCR story. (If you don’t know what a storyboard is, you’ll find out on here eventually. 😛 )
  13. Worked on files…A LOT.
  14. Finished a journal. If you know me, you know this is a big deal. I still can’t believe it. *dies*
  15. Started going through said journal. #helpme
  16. Got a new journal!!!
  17. Worked on developing some background stuff for my FF series. I’m trying to develop each of the different cultures of the kingdoms within my story; there are 11 of them…
  18. Began another excerpt inspired by a trip to the doctor’s office. #painisgoodforinspiration
  19. Oh! And for school, I’ve been reviewing stories/essays/articles and having to write “reviews” on them = my life. I’ve also written a memoir, summary, and definition essay. Not the most exciting stuff, but I’m learning a bunch.

Yea, so that was my month. Now you might be wondering (or not; whateves) what I’ll be doing this month. Well, let me tell you. This November, some of my writing friends and I will be participating in NaNoWriMo! *cue trumpet sound* National Novel Writing Month (NaNoWriMo) is a month-long challenge for young writers and writers in general. The challenge is to write 50,000 words (or less, depending on if you do the young writer’s program) by the end of the month; that divides out to about 1,667 words per day. I know it sounds crazy, and it definitely wasn’t easy last year when I did it, but I went from having 12,000 words for my CCR story to having around 53,000. And if you did that math, yes, I did type up some material I already had and counted it for NaNoWriMo. It was my first time!

All in all, it was hard work, but I was able to flesh out the plot for that story and now I’m going to use this year to work on developing/expanding some of those scenes that I wrote way back in 2015; you should join me! You don’t have to have a story already, you can come up with a whole new one or work on many different stories at once, as long as you end up with 50,00 words total. Sign up today on their website—it’s free! Click here to go to the NaNoWriMo website where you can track your progress and connect with writing buddies who can support you as you try to get through the next 30 days. You might even find KD17 and myself on there. 😉 Just one piece of advice: DON’T TYPE INTO THE TEXT BOXES ON THE WEBSITE!!! This is for a brief synopsis and/or excerpt of your story, not for the whole thing. To avoid losing all your work, type your story into a Word document or Google Drive and save often, like, every five minutes often. I’m serious.

Well, that’s all for now. I’ll be updating my own word count progress throughout Novemember through one of our 3 media channels (either on here, FB, or Insta) and I’d love to hear about your writing progress whether you’re doing NaNoWriMo or not. As always, keep on writing, friends.

Love,

YW

The Halloween Special, part 2

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Chapter 2:

After school, Gwen and Nadia came over to get their costumes on. Gwen decided to be a wizard this year. She wore a vintage, black lace dress, a frilly pink and black ‘magician’s’ garb complete with flowy long sleeves, and a pointy hat to match. She even had a gnarled tree branch that she wrapped some wire around to look a like wand. I had to admit, it was a super cool costume. Nadia wore a white sheet dress with rips in it along with tufts of black gauze sown in various places. With white Uggs and white stockings, she looked the picture of a modern-day ghost. Finally, since I had to go out trick-or-treating, I figured I should try to put together a quality costume, for my friends, of course. I decided to go as a werewolf, so I dressed in a tan turtleneck, a brown skirt, caramel stockings, leather boots, and my mom’s animal fur vest. I also glued felt ears I had cut out onto a headband and used my mom’s eyeliner to paint some whiskers on my face. Once I had explained to Nadia that no animals were harmed in the making of my mom’s faux fur vest (she’s an animal rights’ enthusiast), we all grabbed our pillowcases and headed out for a night of ‘fun’.

The night was perfect for trick or treating, even if I had to go out against my better judgment. The air was warm with the hint of a cool, fall breeze. The wind blew through the red, orange, and yellow-leaved trees, filling the air with pleasant rustling sounds. As we started to collect candy from the first few houses on our street, I actually started to enjoy myself again. As Gwen, Nadia, and I all laughed and talked about our past Halloweens together, I began to feel that it was the right decision to go trick or treating instead of staying home after all. It was like old times…until we knocked on Mr. Cash’s house.

“Trick or Treat!” we all shouted joyfully.

Mr. Cash, a kind, elderly man used to teach at our old elementary school. He always decorated his house with the best Halloween decorations and gave out the full size candy bars. As my friends and I each took our favorite candy from his pumpkin-face bucket, he smiled playfully at us.

“Aren’t we a little too old to be trick or treating?” he said light-heartedly.

Nadia and Gwen laughed as we all sauntered down his driveway to the next house, but as my friends started talking about a project due for art class next week, I frowned. Mr. Cash’s comment still rang in my mind. Too old? I thought, too old for trick or treating? I knew it, I scolded myself, this whole thing is too childish. I should’ve never come out tonight.  I stopped walking before we got to the front door of the next house. Gwen and Nadia turned, concern on their faces.

“What’s wrong, Cass?” Gwen asked.

“He said we were too old to be trick or treating,” I reminded them as embarrassment colored my face.

“Ah, don’t listen to him, Cassie! He was just joking anyway. He loves it when we come to visit him each year,” Gwen consoled.

“Yea, he’s such a sweet old man.” Nadia agreed.

“I don’t know, maybe I should’ve stayed home…I think I’ll just turn around and head back.”

“No!” Gwen said, alarmed, “Come on, Cass! You promised Nadia and me that you would come trick or treating with us!”

“No, I don’t think I can do this.” I said. I never should have come. “Sorry, guys.” Just as I turned around, Nadia grabbed my arm.

“Just one more house, Cass, please…” she begged.

I stared at her for a moment.

“Alright,” I consented, “just one more. Then that’s it.”

Satisfied with my answer, Nadia and Gwen pranced off down the street. As I jogged toward them, I saw that they had stopped dead at the end of the street. Right in front of them was an old, very creepy, very dark house. It looked like it had once been a mansion, but now it was covered with cobwebs and surrounded with gnarly trees that looked like they were dying. Finally catching up with my friends, they turned their puzzled faces toward me.

“Has that creepy house always been there?” Gwen asked.

“I-I don’t remember seeing it here before.” Nadia stuttered.

“Do you think anybody’s inside?” I wondered aloud.

“I don’t know, but it sure looks like whoever lives there wants us to come to the door.” Gwen stated ominously, pointing to a dark hooded figure on the porch. It seemed to be beckoning us to join it.

“I don’t want to go up there!” Nadia said, starting to tremble. She was clearly freaked out. However, Gwen was never one to shy away from a chance to get more candy.

“Ah, don’t be a baby, Nadie,” she said, “What if she has, like, a whole bucket of candy, just waiting to be taken?” she goaded.

“I’m not a baby,” Nadia replied sternly.

“Well, then let’s go.” I decided as we all started up the narrow walkway.

When we arrived at the front door, a wrinkly old lady in a purple cloak approached us. Her skin seemed to glow and her white hair that looked like smoke in the autumn wind. It had a weird kind of shine to it that looked like tinsel was woven in between the strands. She held out a tin tray to us, and smiled, or at least she tried to; she didn’t have many teeth.

“Happy Halloween, children!” she cooed. “How would you young folks like a Halloween cookie?” she said as she offered the contents of the tray to us.

There were only three cookies on it. One was shaped like a wizard’s hat with purple frosting on it. The next one had white frosting on it and was shaped like a little ghost. Finally, there was a crescent shaped cookie with yellow frosting on it. Gwen reached out her hand to take a cookie when Nadia stopped her.

“Gwen…” she warned under her breath.

“Oh please, Nadie,” Gwen whispered back, “She’s just an old lady. What harm could she cause?” Gwen said as she grabbed the hat-shaped cookie and took a bite.

“Yum!” she exclaimed as the old lady smiled. “This cookie is delicious!”

Seeing that Gwen was okay, Nadia followed her example and took the ghost-shaped cookie. After Nadia had taken a bite out of her cookie, the old lady turned toward me and held out her tray.

“How about you, dearie?” she asked. “Wouldn’t you like a cookie, or are you too old for such things?” she said, as her eyes twinkled with mischief.

Slightly annoyed by the old lady’s remark, I snatch up the last cookie, the moon-shaped one, and gobbled it down.

“Well, thanks for the delicious cookies, ma’am but we have to get going. Houses to get to, candy to collect.” Gwen smiled.

“Oh, of course.” The old lady cooed. “Don’t let me get in the way of your adventure. Have fun trick or treating!” she said as she waved us on our way.

Once we had left the dark mansion, I started to taste something funny in my mouth. I think that Nadia and Gwen did too, because they were hunched over and making sour faces.

“Ugh, what is this taste?” Gwen asked, her face distorted in disgust.

“Could it be from those cookies we had?” Nadia asked.

“Ugh, I think so…it’s weird,” I said, “My mouth tastes like…fur…” I coughed.

Suddenly, the world started spinning and Gwen, Nadia, and I all fell to the ground. I think we might have blacked out for a while because when I woke up, it seemed to have gotten darker outside. I sat up, rubbing my head with my hands when I noticed that I wasn’t rubbing my head with my hands; I was rubbing my SNOUT with my PAWS.

I tried to stand up, but I was too dizzy so I crawled to the side of the street; I happened to gaze into a puddle nearby. My face was covered with fur. I had a long snout, real dog ears, whiskers that weren’t drawn on with eyeliner, paws, and a fluffy mane wear my curly, brown hair should have been. I had turned into a werewolf.

I started to scream when I realized that I was howling instead of screaming. Great, I thought. Either I am dreaming, or my parents forgot to tell me something. Just as I was processing my own transformation, I saw Gwen get up from the grass.

Oh boy. Her face…unlike mine wasn’t covered in fur. However, it was covered in…sparkles? Everytime she moved, her face glittered like a disco ball. Her hair was now a shiny, silver color; it took had streaks of sparkles in it. She locked eyes with me, and her face exploded in shock. I don’t think she knew that she looked like a magician…wizard…whatever.

“Cassie?!” she half whispered, half screamed. “What are you?!”

“I don’t know…” I murmured. “I think I might be a werewolf.” I was still trying to process everything when I remembered that Gwen thought she was still human. “Gwen, you have to see yourself. Come look.” I gestured to the puddle.

When she saw her reflection in the mirror, her eyes grew wide. She gasped as she clutched at her hair.

“I…I look like…that lady we saw…”

“Well, at least you’re not old.”

Gwen shot me a dark look. “Not helping, Cass.”

“Sorry.” I amended. I took a moment to regroup. “Ya know, I’m starting to think that that old lady wasn’t just an old lady.”

“No kidding.”

This time I gave Gwen a dark look. “I think she was…”

“A wizard?”

I nodded.

“Wait,” Gwen said, holding up her hands. “If she’s a wizard…”

“Wizardess.” I corrected.

“Whatever… then, she’d be able to cast a spell on us!”

“Possibly, or, cast a spell on something we ate…”

“The cookie!” Gwen exclaimed, realization dawning on her.

“Exactly! She cast a spell so that depending on the cookie we ate, that was the creature we became.”

“Okay, well if that’s true, what did Nadia turn into?” Gwen asked, starting look around her.

“I think a better question is: where is Nadia?” I said, starting to get worried. I didn’t see her anywhere, but I wasn’t sure if that was because it was dark out or she was really gone.

“Nadia!” Gwen bellowed. Nothing but silenced fill the air.

We both stood there for a few seconds until a chilling whisper spoke to us from a bush a little ways away.

“Oooooover, Heeeeere.” A wispy voice called to us.

It was Nadia, only she was transparent, and I don’t mean that she had a very light complexion; she was literally see through. To top it off, she was floating; she had become a ghost. Poor, Nadie. I could only imagine how scared she must be. I knew I was.

“Are you okay, Nadie?” I asked.

“Yessssss,” she moaned, “But I cannnnnn’t stoooooooop taaaaaalking like thisssss!”

“It’s because you’re a ghost, Nadie.” Gwen said matter of factly.

“Yea,” I backed her up. “I think that old lady was a wizard…”

“Wizardess.” Gwen interjected.

I stuck my tongue out at her. “A wizardess who gave us each a magic cookie that turned us into Halloween creatures.” I finished.

“But wwwwwwhyyyyyy?” Nadia asked.

“I don’t know!” Gwen said exasperatedly. “All I know is that we have to find that old lady and demand that she turns us back into humans asap!”

“But where do we start?” I asked our oh-so-fearless leader.

“What do you mean? It’s right over…oh.” She stopped when I pointed out that where the creepy mansion had stood just a couple of minutes before was now…gone; like it had completely vanished and all that was there was an empty yard covered with black trees.

“Wwwwwwwwooooooowwwww!” Nadia exclaimed. “Whhhhhatttt haaaaaappppenned to that hooooouseeeee?”

“It couldn’t have just disappeared. Could it?” Gwen mused.

“We are talking about a crazy old lady who turned you into a wizardess, Nadia into a ghost, and me into a werewolf!” I declared. “I think it’s safe to say that this lady is capable of some strange things.”

“Good point. So what’s the gameplan, then?”

“Well, um, wait!” I screamed in delight. “Gwen, if that lady has powers and she is a wizardess that means that since you are one too…”

“I might have powers too? I don’t think I could change us back though.”

“No, maybe not, but you might be able to use your magic to locate the old lady and her house.”

“Okay…I’ll try.” Gwen said reluctantly. She closed her eyes and held her breath.

When that didn’t work, she pulled out her ‘magic’ wand, held it out in front of her, and started spinning around in circles.

As she was concentrating, and circling, I started to sniff the air with my canine-like nose. There was definitely a strong scent leading out of the neighborhood. It was so strong in fact, that to my astonishment, I could physically see the scent. It was a bright orange streak of smoke bounding down and out of our street. I glanced back at Gwen. I may be able to point us in the right direction, I thought, but I don’t think I can pinpoint where exactly the house will end up. I hoped that Gwen would be able to find its location. Just as I was starting to lose hope, she suddenly stopped spinning and her eyes popped open.

“I’ve found her!” Gwen squealed excitedly, “She’s in the local cemetery! Let’s go!”

“But the cemetery is all the way on the other side of the neighborhood. It’ll take forever to get there,” I pointed out.

“Not for meeeeeee,” Nadia said meekly, “I can just floaaaaaat thereeeeee.”

“Great! Do you think you can carry us?” Gwen asked.

“I think sooooooo,” Nadia nodded as she grabbed onto the back of our collars. “Now, let’s gooooooooo before its toooooooo laaaaaate.”

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The Halloween Special, part 1

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Howdy, young writers! So, as promised, I’m sharing one of my very own original stories. *dies of fearful anticipation for you all to read it* I thought it would be cool to share a piece of my own writing and use it as a means by which to learn from and to just share what my writing process was like when I wrote this piece. Does that mean that I think it’s a perfect work of art and therefore, I’m going to go on and on about how amazing my writing is and how you should mimic everything I do? Heck no. 😛 My writing (and this story especially) is NOT amazing. I do hope it’s a cute story, however, and that you enjoy it. I also hope, for myself as well as all of you, that we can learn what to do, and what NOT to do when writing a story based on reading this one. I always find that going back over old writing is a great way to see how far you’ve come over the years, how you can improve, and what old ideas you can rewrite so they become new and exciting.

All that being said, here’s some things to keep in mind…

  • I wrote this story in 10th grade for an English short story assignment, which means that my writing has gotten A LOT better over the past 2 1/2 years…at least I think so. 😛
  • Some of the story elements I was working with at the time included: characterization, description, plot development, dialogue, and writing in first-person point-of-view. In fact, I still remember the morning I spent having breakfast at the Double D Diner and drafting character profile sheets for the 3 characters in this story. #goodtimes I still have those sheets today, along with a brief scene-by-scene outline. Let me just say having both of those things was extremely helpful when it came time to actually start writing the story.
  • I went through many drafts with this story, primarily because of one particular scene. (I’ll let you know which scene that was once I’ve posted all the chapters.)
  • I have slightly edited this story already (along with the help of KD17, thanks gurrrrrrrrrl) and may or may not be done with this story. I’ve been experimenting with idea of doing some more, holiday-inspired sequels, as well as expanding this one.
  • The theme of this story was based around friendship, loyalty, and the importance of acting a little “childish” sometimes. 😉

 

Without further adieu, here’s, “The Halloween Special”! (Super original title, I know.)

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The Halloween Special

by: Young Writer

Chapter 1:

Today was like any other ordinary day. I got up, washed my face, brushed my teeth, combed my mass of curly hair, slipped into my jeans, and headed downstairs. As I started into the bright and airy kitchen, my little sister slammed into me, almost spilling her orange juice all over my favorite green top.

“Lily! Watch where you’re going!” I exclaimed exasperatedly. Lily is nine years old and has a knack for creating chaos wherever she goes. Today was no exception.

“Sorry,” she giggled lightheartedly, “But I was just showing mommy my Halloween costume. Look!” She starts prancing wildly around the room with a bagel in one hand and her orange juice in the other, “Don’t I look beautiful?” Lily beamed as she sashayed around the kitchen in a her purple tutu and matching fairy wings. She set down her bagel to grab her sparkly wand, and then proceeded to bop me on the head with it all while shouting, “I’m a fairy princess!”

Oh, it’s Halloween, I suddenly realized, rubbing the now sore spot on my head. It’s Halloween…Oh man, I need more time! I thought to myself as I slowly began to panic. Normally, I love Halloween; the costumes, candy, spooky house decorations, and of course trick-or-treating.

For as long as I can remember, I’ve gone trick-or-treating with my two best friends: Gwendolyn Spencer and Nadia Jones. In fact, that’s how we met. My family and I had just moved into the neighborhood, and Gwen’s mom invited us to go trick-or-treating with them and Nadia’s family, since we didn’t know our way around the neighborhood very well; we’ve been best friends ever since. We’ve never missed one year of trick-or-treating, even that one year when it was below freezing and Nadia had a really bad cold. But, this year…well things were different. Right before school started, I had my fifteenth birthday. Besides getting a little taller, I began to feel as though things I used to do with best friends, like trick-or-treating, were childish. I mean, we were practically adults now, so we should start acting like it. Right?

So, as my first mature and adult-like decision, I silently vowed to hang up my candy sack and enjoy a scary movie instead. Of course, I had always planned to tell Nadia and Gwen about my decision…I just sort of put it off until the last minute because I was afraid that they would be mad at me. Now, my timing couldn’t be worse. It was the day of  Halloween, and I had yet to face them. I had to tell them…

“I’m not going trick-or-treating this year.”

“What do you mean you’re not going trick-or-treating this year?” Gwen asked me, astonished. At least she wasn’t stunned into complete silence, like Nadia. I had ended up confronting them in the hallway of our school, right before class started. Somehow, I had “sensed” them turning the corner into the hallway before I actually laid eyes on them. This “super-sense” happened a lot…especially around Halloween. It always came in real handy when my friends and I would try to figure out which houses had the biggest candy bars.

“I…I…I mean…” I started to stammered. My sight dropped to the floor of the hallway and my cheeks started to turn pink. Oh no! Don’t you chicken out! I warned myself. I was starting to lose my courage, but I had to stand strong. I couldn’t go trick or treating with them. It was beneath me now, a thing of the past. Besides, who needs trick-or-treating, anyway? It’s for kids. After a brief, mental pep talk I clenched my jaw and tilted my head up to face my friends. “You heard me; I’m NOT going trick-or-treating this year.”

Gwen, much taller and more menacing than me when she didn’t get what she wanted, marched closer. She glared right into my face as she loomed over me, and I thought I was going to turn into a puddle right on the spot. I swear, that girl could scare off even a wizard, if they were real. Then, her dark eyes lit up with amusement; she started to chuckle, which quickly grew into a full-out laugh.

“That’s-that’s…” she tried to choke out between her roars of laughter, “That’s a good one, Cass! You really had us going. Right, Nadie?”

I glanced at Nadia, who hesitantly looked at Gwen for reassurance that I was kidding. She too began to laugh, though it was more of a nervous giggle.

I stared bewildered at my two friends as I tried to convince them of my sincerity. “Seriously guys, I’m not going this year. Look, I know we have had a habit of going together in the past but…”

At that, Gwen’s brow started to furrow. She cut me off,  “We have NEVER missed a year as long as we can remember! Right, Nadia?”

She glanced at Nadia, who has always been more of a shrinking violet. Sometimes, Gwen and I forgot she was even there whenever we got into our ‘heated debates’. It was like she turned completely invisible. At that moment, she had drooped her curly, red hair over her eyes as if it would prevent us from forcing her to pick a side. Gwen glared at her intensely, and finally she spoke up.

“Um…yes…that’s correct,” she whispered. She was the most soft-spoken person I had ever met, but she also had the kindest heart, so naturally, Gwen and I were lucky to have her. I sighed, starting to get annoyed at my friend’s persistence.

“Yes, I know we have gone every year since we were little, but times have changed. I’m fifteen now and going trick or treating now is just, well…”

“Go ahead. Spit it out!” Gwen demanded.

“Well, it would just seem…CHILDISH!” I yelled. Both Gwen and Nadia winced at those words, and it was evident on their faces that I had hurt them. However, unlike Nadia, who seem more wounded by my words, Gwen just grew more furious and saucily scowled at me. She crossed her arms.

“So what are you saying, Cassie? That going trick or treating with your friends is stupid and too ‘immature’ for you?!” Gwen challenged.

“YES! THAT’S EXACTLY WHAT I AM SAYING!” I bellowed. One look at Gwen and Nadia’s shocked faces and I knew I’d messed up. I had made it seem as though spending time with my friends was ‘uncool’ They weren’t; trick-or-treating was. I took a moment to breathe and gathered myself as any mature adult would have done in my predicament, “Look, that’s not what I meant. I love spending time with you guys, but I just feel that now that we are older we should end our old traditions…like trick or treating.”

Gwen and Nadia were silent as they took in my words, and just when I thought that they had finally come to accept my decision, Nadia came toward me.

“But Cass,” she muttered sadly, “you always come with us. It won’t be the same without you…please, just come with us, for our sake. We need you.” Her bright blue eyes pleaded with mine. Darn her innocent little face. She reminded me a lot of my little sister. I groaned. I knew that at that point, I couldn’t say no, not to Nadia. She never asked anyone for anything. She always thought of others first, especially when it came to me and Gwen. I had to do this, for her, even if it was childish. I stared at her large, puppy-dog eyes as I reluctantly changed my mind.

“Fine,” I relented as Nadia’s face lit up with a smile. Gwen, still peeved at my outburst, turned away. “I’ll go trick or treating with you guys.” At that, she turned, a slow smile spreading across her olive-skinned face. “But don’t expect me to enjoy it!” I spat back at her smug expression. Completely frustrated, I grabbed my history book, shut my locker, and slumped off to class. This was going to be humiliating.

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To be continued…

Dead Wrong by Susan Sleeman

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Back Cover:

A KILLER’S CLOSING IN…

When her client and old college friend is murdered, P.I. Kat Justice knows the killer will come for her next. Her survival depends on finding her unknown enemy first…and working with homicide detective Mitch Elliot, her onetime crush. It’ll take all her professional skills to ignore the sparks between them, but Kat can’t allow the handsome cop to get close. She’s seen too many people she loves die, so she vows just to do her job without getting emotionally involved. Yet keeping her distance may not be the best way to protect her heart—or their lives.

(Book 2 of 5 in the Justice Agency Series)

My Writing Takeaway: Can I just say: Susan Sleeman is one of my new favorite CCR/Suspense authors. I’m gonna say it. She is. She’s right up there with Dee Henderson and Irene Hannon. When I was at the beach this past summer, I mentioned in a blog post that I had gone to a little book shop and gotten a lot *ahem, around thirty* books. Among locating some of the books by authors I’ve already read, I noticed a few small paperbacks from Love Inspired (for those of you who do not know what Love Inspired is, it’s a branch of Harlequin publishing that is devoted to producing clean, Christian romance novels in all different genres). Anyway, I wasn’t sure about some of these books, because I didn’t know the author. However, after I read “Dead Wrong”, I was so glad that I had bothered to get another one of Susan’s books; it was so good! It has romance (of course), action, mystery, and SUSPENSE. In fact, I had not even finished reading the first chapter when I was on the edge of my seat…well, bed (it was the middle of the night). My brother burst in, wondering if I was still awake, and I practically jumped out of my skin—I was so scared. 😛 See, one of the MANY things I love about Susan Sleeman’s writing style is the way she starts off her stories. From the very beginning, from the very first page even, she grabs her reader’s attention.

I won’t give spoilers on this book because 1) I strongly dislike when people do that to me and 2) you should actually READ IT but I will say this: Sleeman opens her book by describing a highly dangerous scenario. The suspense builds as the MC is thrown into the action and even though the reader really has no idea what on earth is going on or who the MC is, they can’t help but be captivated by what’s happening; the result is a reader who can’t put their book down or go to sleep without finding out what happens next (or at least, that was true in my case). What I like to call this technique of capturing your reader is a “hook”. Right from the get-go, Susan Sleeman “hooks” her readers with a dramatic opening scene, which effectively brings them into action and gets them to continue through the story just to see how the conflict in the beginning is resolved. This technique is usually the most effective when applied to a mystery/thriller/suspense story, but it can be used in any genre as a way to catch your readers by surprise and get them interested in your story. While I was reading it, the story seemed follow a “reverse-plot” pattern; it opened at what seemed to be the climax of the story followed by some falling action when most stories usually go through an exposition, conflict, rising action, THEN climax and falling action/resolution. Again, this keeps the reader on their toes and breaks away from the status-quo of plot lines.

As I mentioned before, the reader doesn’t really know much about the MCs at the beginning because they are too focused on the action taking place in the first few chapters. However, this sheds light on another thing Susan Sleeman excels at: she reveals bits of the character’s backstories a little at a time, showing first the character’s behavior/personality and then explaining to the reader why they act the way they do. When getting to know some in real-life, how often do you meet someone for the first time and know everything that ever influenced them and how that’s attributed to their behavior? Unless you’re a telepath, the answer is never. In the same situation, how off-putting is it when you meet someone and they tell you everything about themselves? It’s a little weird, isn’t it? Well, it’s the same thing when you get to know the characters of a story. What Susan Sleeman does is uses the hook to bring the readers into her story, then lets them observe the characters; how they talk, interact, think, their likes/dislikes, etc. Then, she starts to hint at what exactly in their backstories has attributed to their personalities—what it is that is making the characters do what they do. Again, this is something I like to call “backstory breadcrumbs” in that the author is leaving a trail of information about the character for the reader to follow until they finally get to the know character and see the significance of the character’s past in relation to the story. The “hook”, when paired with “backstory breadcrumbs” is an excellent way of keeping your story fresh and enticing to your readers, which is exactly what “Dead Wrong” exemplifies.

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In addition, Sleeman uses 3rd Person Limited in her story, which I know, I’ve lamented before about how tedious using that viewpoint can be, but she really does a wonderful job of giving you the full picture of what is going on inside the heads of both MCs while advancing the plot of the story; no game of catch-up here.

Also, DIALOGUE. I love her dialogue. It’s so real and funny, just like the characters; all her characters, though believers, are very, very, VERY flawed. They struggle with trusting God, not worrying, and forgiveness, which is something I think we can relate to. Not only that, but Susan herself talks about her own struggle with trusting God in a letter to her readers in the back of the book. She points out that trusting God is not a “one and done” kind of thing; it’s a continual, conscious choice to let God be in control of your life every moment of everyday and I just love that. Her characters are also well-developed; I almost feel like I could sit down with them and have some tea or something. 😛 Finally, Sleeman focuses specifically on the use of the dialogue to tell her story. What is said, and what is not said, on the page drives the story. She gives descriptions that give the reader very vivid pictures of the setting and accurately explains the way the characters are speaking (intonation), but she doesn’t go overboard. She’s eloquent and able to get her point across without the use of any fluffs or frills to cloud her writing; there is a balance between being descriptive, advancing the action of the story, and letting the characters truly speak for themselves that is inspiring. I hope that one day, I can find that balance in my own writing as well.

So in closing, here are my basic writing takeaways (sorry there was so many!):

  1. Use a “hook” at the beginning of your story; surprise your reader!
  2. Let your readers get to know your characters slowly by using “backstory breadcrumbs”.
  3. Make your characters relatable, and well-rounded. Ask yourself: could I sit down with my character like they were a real person? If not, figure out what needs to change to make your character more believable.
  4. Let your dialogue speak for itself; cut down on the “fluff” in your writing but be descriptive enough to let your readers “see” and “hear” what is happening; find your balance.

Well, that’s all for now. If you haven’t had a chance to read any of Susan Sleeman’s books, I highly suggest that you do soon (it’s in our online store btw). You won’t be sorry, and her suspenseful stories are perfect for this spooky time of year! 😉

 

*”Dead Wrong” includes some scenes of violence.*

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KD17 here. Sorry we haven’t been updating as much; we have not forgotten about this site! Both Young Writer’s and my schedules have been INSANE. Young Writer has started college, and she also has about one million other extracurricular activities in addition to writing and keeping up this blog. I can’t even keep track of all of it (and I’m her bestie!).

I have also been pretty busy because I just came back from vacation yesterday. I went to Acadia National Park on Mount Desert Island, and I’ll just say, I would HIGHLY recommend it. If you ever need woods-y fantasy inspiration for writing (and are also up for some hiking), just go there! Here is a pic of just some of the magic:

Acadia is magic

I also got an Instagram account, so I’ve been trying to keep the new art rolling so I can be consistent on there. If you’d like to check out my page, just click here. Young Writer also as Instagram now! Here’s her link.

So, as for content for the blog, we do have a plan! Next week, Young Writer will release a book review for a suspense thriller/murder mystery she read (just in time for Halloween 😉 ). After that she’s going to post SOME OF HER FICTION WRITING! *collective gasp of excitement* That’s right, for the last few days of October, YW herself will release a holiday special short story that she wrote for school about two years ago. I have personally read it, and it is super cute, funny, and suspenseful at times, but has a great message. Looking forward for you all to read it! She will be posting five chapters hopefully around the time of Halloween.

Okay, so that was just a little update to show that we are still alive. We will try to update this blog as much as possible, and as always, never stop art-ing, friends, whether it be writing, drawing, cooking, or whatever you’re into. Just keep practicing.

Love,

KelseyDragon17

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