KelseyDragon17’s 3rd PO Excerpt

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Hey, it’s KelseyDragon17 here! I’m writing this post to show you guys how I’ve been doing with writing in 3rd Person Omniscient. Young Writer posted previously from one of her stories, so I’ve decided to include a piece of mine. I hope you like it! 🙂

(also my main character, Kelsey, is a dragon [as maybe you could have guessed from my screen name])

Kelsey dove off the cliff, not even thinking about her own safety as she watched her only companion plummeting to his death. She pulled her wings in tight to gain as much speed as she could to reach him in time.

Out of the corner of his eye, Jeff saw a blue streak above him. But he couldn’t process what that streak was. All he knew was he was falling and he was going to die. He couldn’t think of anything other than his rapidly approaching death. Then out of nowhere something solid like a thick branch whacked him in the chest, and despite getting the air knocked out of him, he grasped it for dear life.

She pulled him off her tail and held him against her chest, all the while flailing her wings around, trying to catch the air. She was panicking, as was Jeff.

And in their panic, they both prayed. Kelsey cried out in despair, God, I haven’t trusted you in the past to guide me. But I’m asking you now, please Father, save me to save Jeff. Jeff’s prayer cannot be translated into words, but he thought of God and desperately cried out for both of their lives.

Kelsey opened her wings at long last, and the wind caught underneath the membrane. She opened her eyes and saw the trees blur past her, and she knew her prayer was answered. And to her, flying was amazing. She flapped once to keep her and Jeff from gliding into the trees.

Jeff kept his eyes shut, waiting for the end to come, but it never did. And his stomach was no longer in his throat from falling. He felt something nudge his head and he opened his teary eyes to see Kelsey, her head flipped upside down, staring at him, wondering if he were okay. He quickly wiped his tears, I hope she didn’t see that.

She did, though she didn’t mind. I’ve got you, Jeff.

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